District Writing Assessment

District Writing Assessment Fall 2011/2012 School Year

I was sitting next to the Christmas tree, my sisters on my right and my parents on my left. Christmas spirit fills the air as I open my last present. It was wrapped in a small gold box with a blue silky bow on top. I ripped the bow off and slowly open the box.

“It’s a, It’s a,” I scream, “It’s a ticket! It’s a ticket?” What’s the ticket for I think. I look at it closely.

The ticket reads, “Plane 102, trip-Florida, 12/26/2091” I’m going to Florida I thought to myself. “I’m going to Florida,” I screamed.

The next morning- I woke up at 4 a.m. and my family and I packed into our bright blue van.  When we arrived at the airport my parents went to get our luggage checked in and my older sister ordered me and my younger sister Katina to go sit down. About 5 minutes later my parents came over to us and told us to go to the bathroom quick before we got on the plane. Once we got back from the bathroom we entered the plane.

I sat in a row with Katina and my mom while my dad and older sister Alex sat behind us.   The flight attendant came up to me and Katina and offered us each a pop.

Katina immediately said, “Yes,” while I nodded no and said, “Do you have any lemonade?”

The flight attendant answered, “Yes,” and gave us our drinks. I took a sip; the lemonade was ice cold just like my body. I was anxious to get to Florida so I could feel the sun beating down on me and the warm air filling my body.  I was almost there; I look out the plane window one more time.  I see a plane coming full sped right at us. My first thought is that I’m going to die. I scream for help even though I know there will be no way to help. I looked out once again and as I do I see the plane crashing into us.  That was the last thing a remembered until…

2/6/2094:   I woke up it was a Monday afternoon.

I saw my dad looking at me and yelling, “She woke up! She woke up!” I sat up and looked around, I was in a hospital. I don’t know how I got there.

 My dad explains, “Do you remember Christmas? Your mother and I had given you plane tickets. About 5 minutes before we were supposed to land another plane crashed into us. Both planes tumbled to the ground killing 17 people and hurting over 60.”

“What?” I think back. I remember a pale man with short brown hair looking at me panicked. I remember Katina questioning my yelling.  I remember a baby crying. I remember.  I remember a plane crashing into us.

“Yes! I remember!” I cried.

My dad said, “I thought you would never wake up.”

“Where are Mom, Katina, and Alex?” I said wanting to see their faces again. My dad started crying. At that moment I was scared.

“Your mom has died,” He sobbed.

“No! She couldn’t have!” I exclaimed. The conversation stopped. My dad went silent and I started bawling. All I could think about is my mom and all of the wonderful times we had together. I was so heartbroken. I looked up my dad was gone he must have left the room.

When I woke up the next morning the doctor came in my room.  She told me that the bottom half of my body was completely paralyzed. I looked at my feet and tried wiggling my toes.  I noticed I couldn’t. I still don’t know how I didn’t realize this the day before.

The doctor noticed the said look on my face and said, “But I could get you a wheel chair or even robotic legs.” I again went speechless and thought. I don’t want to be in a wheel chair the rest of my life.  Prosthetic legs were an option but do I really want to be half robot? Is there a cure? No. Could I find a cure? I think back to my 6^th grade science class. My teacher Mrs. O’ Hern told us about the kid who had lung cancer and raised money to find the cure. He saved himself and so many others. Could I do that? I could I find the cure to un- paralyze my body? I was determined.  That was my mission and I stuck to it.

07/06/2101: I was ready to give up this was my concoction.  I mixed together Advil, protein, milk, and eggs. I put it in a shot tube and forced it into my leg. It didn’t work. I woke up the next morning upset. Then I felt something. I felt a pain.  A pain in my leg! I found the cure to un- paralyze my body! I was free!

District Writing Assessment

Depression

            Once upon a time I was happy

            But that’s when I had a grandpappy

            Now I am always sad

            So sad that I feel like I’m going mad

            I ask myself why I am upset

            Is it because I haven’t met my true love yet

            Or is it simply because I’m alone

            Or because I broke my funny bone

            There was once a time I was content

            But now I don’t own one cent

            Now I am always gloomy

            So gloomy I think I’m going loony

            I ask myself why I am blue

            Is it because I can’t afford shampoo

            Or is it because I have an ugly face

            I know! it’s because I don’t have a living place

                                                                                              

District Writing Assessment Spring 2011/2012 School Year

  He's With Us

 Authors Note: This piece is a response to the book Heaven is for real. In this poem I am discussing how we touch God's heart every day just like Colton did when he went to heaven.

Beyond the trees

Over the mountains

Below the water

We love him there

On a ship

an airplane

or in a car

We feel him there

In the clouds

Beside us

In heaven

We see him there

 Afraid

Authors Note: I decided to write this poem because I had writers block on another piece and this was why. In this piece I am writing about Basketball tryouts I have later on today. In this piece I do not exactly have a pattern but some words do rhyme. 

I am scared.

Scared that I’ll run and fall.

Scared that I’ll shoot and miss.

Scared that someone will steal my ball.

Scared that I won’t make the team.

Scared that they’ll make fun of me.

Scared of tryouts, I am.

I am scared.